The words don't flow and both of the websites are disjointed. £1000 was extremely expensive for what you received, where did you get the copywriter from??
There is no real clarity to your messages on either of the websites and to be honest, I gave up reading after a few sentences because it didn't appear to make sense or reach out to the reader!
If your still looking for some more help or want them rewritten, give me a shout and i'll see what I can do for you!
Sarah
