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jfemarketing · 11-16-2007, 11:10 AM

Hi, guys!

I have two websites, Money Earning Makover System! and The World's Best Ever Beginner Marketing Package!

Money Earning Makover System! was written by a paid copywriter for over £1000 UK pounds. I think it was a waste of money.

The World's Best Ever Beginner Marketing Package! is my own writing.

The first day I advertised Money Earning Makover System!, I had 3 sales! Then, nothing... then nothing...then nothing... haha

Could someone have a wee look at these and tell me what you think?

Thanks soo much!!!!

-Andy

Wilks_eye · 11-16-2007, 11:57 AM

First impressions of your sites are that it looks like any other site, with a get-rich-quick atittude.

First, establish who you are, what you do and what you are successful at. Prove your expertise on the subject.

colmodwyer · 11-17-2007, 06:46 AM

Remember that copy is just one part of the sales funnel; and although I don't think it's great (on either site), that's probably not your only problem.

I think the issue here, is that you are trying to sell marketing products, without really knowing too much about marketing yourself; and for that reason you've got sweet FA when it comes to credibility.

Also, you've obviously just got MRR to a bunch of products that will have already been sold 10 times over by much bigger marketer's than thou. So you'll find your prospects have already bought, or passed on a few of the ones you are offering.

I think £1,000 for a copywriter was a waste of money; but not necessarily because the copy is crap, but because you really aren't driving a hungry market to your pages.

My opinion of course; but I don't think I'm wrong...

Colm

SFolega · 02-24-2008, 08:46 AM

The words don't flow and both of the websites are disjointed. £1000 was extremely expensive for what you received, where did you get the copywriter from??

There is no real clarity to your messages on either of the websites and to be honest, I gave up reading after a few sentences because it didn't appear to make sense or reach out to the reader!

If your still looking for some more help or want them rewritten, give me a shout and i'll see what I can do for you!

Sarah

LeifAlexander · 03-07-2008, 04:09 PM

I know this is quite an old thread, but I was so struck by the story here that I had to reply.

The weirdest thing about these sites, which hasn't been mentioned yet, is that the sites offer instant riches, but display extreme poverty.

Surely if you have a get-rich-quick scheme you will have some money yourself - enough to build a good website with nice pictures.

I'm not sure who goes in for all these schemes anyway, but I think you would need a slicker image to convince most people.

Good luck with the re-design.

11-16-2007, 11:10 AM	#1 (permalink)
jfemarketing New Poster Join Date: Nov 2007 Posts: 2	I Could Use Some Help! Hi, guys! I have two websites, Money Earning Makover System! and The World's Best Ever Beginner Marketing Package! Money Earning Makover System! was written by a paid copywriter for over £1000 UK pounds. I think it was a waste of money. The World's Best Ever Beginner Marketing Package! is my own writing. The first day I advertised Money Earning Makover System!, I had 3 sales! Then, nothing... then nothing...then nothing... haha Could someone have a wee look at these and tell me what you think? Thanks soo much!!!! -Andy

11-17-2007, 06:46 AM	#3 (permalink)
colmodwyer Regular Poster Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Glasgow Posts: 13	Remember that copy is just one part of the sales funnel; and although I don't think it's great (on either site), that's probably not your only problem. I think the issue here, is that you are trying to sell marketing products, without really knowing too much about marketing yourself; and for that reason you've got sweet FA when it comes to credibility. Also, you've obviously just got MRR to a bunch of products that will have already been sold 10 times over by much bigger marketer's than thou. So you'll find your prospects have already bought, or passed on a few of the ones you are offering. I think £1,000 for a copywriter was a waste of money; but not necessarily because the copy is crap, but because you really aren't driving a hungry market to your pages. My opinion of course; but I don't think I'm wrong... Colm __________________ *** Roads? Where we're going we don't need roads.

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11-16-2007, 11:57 AM	#2 (permalink)
Wilks_eye Regular Poster Join Date: Oct 2007 Posts: 41	First impressions of your sites are that it looks like any other site, with a get-rich-quick atittude. First, establish who you are, what you do and what you are successful at. Prove your expertise on the subject.

02-24-2008, 08:46 AM	#4 (permalink)
SFolega New Poster Join Date: Feb 2008 Posts: 9	The words don't flow and both of the websites are disjointed. £1000 was extremely expensive for what you received, where did you get the copywriter from?? There is no real clarity to your messages on either of the websites and to be honest, I gave up reading after a few sentences because it didn't appear to make sense or reach out to the reader! If your still looking for some more help or want them rewritten, give me a shout and i'll see what I can do for you! Sarah

03-07-2008, 04:09 PM	#5 (permalink)
LeifAlexander New Poster Join Date: May 2007 Location: Brighton Posts: 5	I know this is quite an old thread, but I was so struck by the story here that I had to reply. The weirdest thing about these sites, which hasn't been mentioned yet, is that the sites offer instant riches, but display extreme poverty. Surely if you have a get-rich-quick scheme you will have some money yourself - enough to build a good website with nice pictures. I'm not sure who goes in for all these schemes anyway, but I think you would need a slicker image to convince most people. Good luck with the re-design.