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M-i-t-c-h · 01-18-2008, 05:48 PM

been working on this image to use in marketing material for my photographic company. Getting close to the finished article now i think and just wanted to see how other people will react to it?
brutally honest critique welcome.

hellosmithy · 01-30-2008, 08:48 AM

I think you could play around a bit more with your type layout and choice of font.
Also, I can see what you're going for with the lens shutters in the eye, but what is the thing on the right? Looks like it could be a camera on a tripod but it's a bit obscure. I think maybe keep it simple and just go with the shutters.
You could maybe even try and subtly make the pupil resemble earth, to tie in with your tag line 'I Can See The World', I don't know maybe it's cheesy but I think it could look really good if done well.

Let us know how you get on.

Ben

businessesforsale · 02-02-2008, 03:57 PM

Agree entirely with Ben.

The main image is clear and slick, but the camera thing on the right is possibly unnecessary, you don't want people trying to work out what it actually is. I would lose it. The typeface is a bit plain. The layout of the text needs some more experimentation.

fonzee666 · 02-07-2008, 03:18 PM

Definatly change the typeface, with an image that minimal less is more (to nick a phrase of someone important) as the tagline is in the url might you get rid of one or the other. perhaps if you made the eye more like a shutter you could remove the camera, but that might be as i now know what its ment to be about. Might be something to think about...let us know how it goes

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fonzee666 New Poster Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Portmsouth Posts: 4	Definatly change the typeface, with an image that minimal less is more (to nick a phrase of someone important) as the tagline is in the url might you get rid of one or the other. perhaps if you made the eye more like a shutter you could remove the camera, but that might be as i now know what its ment to be about. Might be something to think about...let us know how it goes __________________ No one asks me a question then its been a good day, either that or the buildings on fire. Red Wasp Telemarketing Business To Business Marketing Solutions

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01-30-2008, 08:48 AM	#2 (permalink)
hellosmithy Super Poster Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Shanghai Posts: 94	I think you could play around a bit more with your type layout and choice of font. Also, I can see what you're going for with the lens shutters in the eye, but what is the thing on the right? Looks like it could be a camera on a tripod but it's a bit obscure. I think maybe keep it simple and just go with the shutters. You could maybe even try and subtly make the pupil resemble earth, to tie in with your tag line 'I Can See The World', I don't know maybe it's cheesy but I think it could look really good if done well. Let us know how you get on. Ben

02-02-2008, 03:57 PM	#3 (permalink)
businessesforsale New Poster Join Date: Jan 2008 Posts: 5	Agree entirely with Ben. The main image is clear and slick, but the camera thing on the right is possibly unnecessary, you don't want people trying to work out what it actually is. I would lose it. The typeface is a bit plain. The layout of the text needs some more experimentation.